I respect my daddy all my life. I love my daddy. One time I played tag with my daddy and the dogs and me. Also we had fun. We played 100 times and also we were at grandpas house there were 2 dogs there. My daddy took me to the store and I got a pizza lunchable and I ate lunch with my daddy. It was good.
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Your story tells us how much you love your daddy by SHOWING us -- playing tag with the dogs, playing 100 times, him buying you lunch and eating together. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI liked your story; it was very descriptive. Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteElizabeth,
ReplyDeleteWhat are the names of the dogs? Do they look alike? What colors are they? Do your dogs catch things?
Nancy
Good post, Elizabeth. Sounds like you had a great time. I bet you got all worn out running around with the dogs. Maybe the dogs and your Daddy got worn out too! Be sure and write more.
ReplyDeleteDavid
i like your story it is nice
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth
ReplyDeletePoint: I really enjoyed reading the description of the activities that you and your daddy do together, for example playing tag, going to your grandpa's house, going to the store and going to get pizza. My favorite sentences were those in which you described what you did with your daddy: "One time I played tag with my daddy and the dogs and me." "We played 100 times and also we were at grandpas house there were 2 dogs there. My daddy took me to the store and I got a pizza lunchable and I ate lunch with my daddy."
Question: I would be very interested to know more about the dogs you played with. What do they look like? Do they run faster than you? Do they run faster than your daddy? What sounds do they make? Do they pant afterwards? What happens to their tongues when they are panting? Do you know why this happens to their tongues?
Keep up the good work!!
All the best
Karen