I've heard a firework burst into flames.
I've been scared of Monday is scared.
It's something that goes around my house on Halloween.
The small of green apple pie makes me want to eat the pie up.
Once I went on a screaming eagle.
I was scared because I touched a tree.
I have a dog named BJ.
I lost 2 cousin in one year. I also lost my grandma.
I'll tell you sincerely I hate people who call me names.
I found a 20 dollar bill on the floor.
Hi Lanaireoje,
ReplyDeleteI like the word 'sincerely' that you used, it's a great word! "I'll tell you sincerely I hate people who call me names."
Can you give a little more detail about one of the things you wrote about? What was scary about touching the tree? From this sentence: "I was scared because I touched a tree."
I like your writing, keep up the good work!
Lance
I don't know if some words were misspelled: "The small of green apple pie makes me want to eat the pie up." The word small should have been spelled "smell", right?
ReplyDeleteBut as it is written, your piece sounds like a poem. It sounds like you have many ideas.
It is important to be clear so that people can understand us. Next time, maybe you could focus on one subject like your dog or the eagle. Or the connection between fireworks and Halloween. Tell us why fireworks make you think of Halloween.
Monique