Theador the owl was getting ready for the best night of his natural life. His parents were going to go hunting with grandpa because he had no left. His babysitter was coming to watch him. Theador has a problem, he flies when he gets scared. He’s scared which is practically all the time. He’s scared at almost everything especially the dark.
“Hi.” I made dinner It’s your favorite cat with a mouse sub lay.” Chuck said.
“It’s still alive. I hate it when It’s a live animal.” Theador said.
“No Theador.” Chuck replied.
“Oh and that has still has fur!” Theador said.
(Five hours later)
“Hey Theador it’s your favorite show,” Chuck said.
“Ya! Let’s watch” Theador said.
“Today’s episode is called the scare.” The person in the TV said.
“Ah!” Theador yelled.
And he started to fly around the tree ten times.
“Stop! It’s ok we don’t have to watch it.” Chuck said.
“We have to it’s my favorite show!” Theador said.
“Theador don’t be different. Now get down so we can have some hot coco.” Chuck said.
“Ok.” Theador replied.
(Two hours later after the show)
“Ok time for bed,” Chuck said.
“Wait going to sleep is at night and night is dark No, no, no! Theador said.
“Good night.” Bob said while leaving his room.
Theador struggled and he let out a huge yawn and fell asleep. Then he dreamed of as monster. Then he flew to the ceiling. He dreamed of a bad hair day. Flew out the out the room. He dreamed of a eyeball. He was about to fly to his babysitter. But just then the door opened.
“We are home.” Theador parents said.
“I’m sorry.” Theador said while opening his eyes.
“Where’s the baby sitter?” His mom asked.
“Here I am. We had a lovely time.” Chuck said.
And they all laughed.
Poor Theador, being scared all of the time! Why is he so scared? He sure had bad luck that night, live food, scary stuff on his tv show, and bad dreams. I was glad that his babysitter made him cocoa as he definitely earned it.
ReplyDeleteTeresa D.
Great story Ben. I like how you used a lot of different ideas for Theador's bad dreams. he dreamed of as monster, a bad hair day and an eyeball.
ReplyDeleteI wonder why Theador felt so scared all of the time? Maybe he needs a comfy toy or blanket that he feels safe with?
Ms Vue.
I can really understand what it's like to have a dream about a bad hair day. I am glad that Theador was able to fall asleep while he was left with a babysitter, as that is not always so easy to do. He seems to be more brave than he realizes!
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
This is a fun story. It has a lot of humor and your voice as a writer comes through. For the most part, you used quotations very accurately and I liked that you used other words besides "said."
ReplyDeleteThe one thing to work on, is maybe expanding each of the scenes a little, so they are not so choppy and abrupt. The great thing about this is it also give you more chances to tell us about funny Theodore.